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Honeybee
February 28th, 2006, 11:06 PM
a little thing i wrote for english...

When you asked about my dreams for this world I see:

Shades of gray, green earth, blue birds, hands shaking, and foxes racing through the summer forest. No guns, no anger, people playing, trains on their tracks clean as a whistle, and culture with amazement. People throwing their heads back, in the middle of a crowd, laughing wrinkling their starch stiff suits.

When you asked me about my dreams for my neighbors and brothers I see:

People of uniform but still able to tell everyone apart, smiles bold, laughter and play. A ball rolls into a man’s foot. He picks it up, and hands it to the girl in a pink and yellow flower dress with a kind smile.

When you asked me for my dreams I see:

I see myself standing tall, consoling, shattering and putting the pieces back together, and simplicity. Tap dancing the stage away and finding no one in the audience, a cheesy smile, a pat on the head. A welcome greeting, being the best, running the farthest climbing the hardest, winning the race. Experiencing everything, staring at the stars, Swimming upstream, painting my world in words, writing my book that becomes famous. Having people saying “I love you” “thank you”, walking the streets I once knew, having a whole of carton of ice cream at three am. Finding what I have searched for my whole life, being able to fail and laugh about it, sing in front of an audience and get applause, having the nerve to kiss my love without thinking.

But when you get down to it dreaming and seeing aren’t always enough to make it happen. So for my last dream I want to put, able to grasp the complexity of my dreams and still able to accomplish them.

Honeybee~

Honeybee
March 2nd, 2006, 12:49 AM
sry for double posting but i came up with another one

The boy's violin

no one said a sound
and no one gathered round'
to the boy with the violin
playing for his chance at din

People walked on by
And no one stoped to try
to just say hello
or say i have to go
cause~

no one said a sound
to the melodies around
to the boy with the melodies
who always played off key

no one said a sound
to the sweet little kin
"Thats some melody but
"Your playing off key"

and no one said a sound
and no foot left the ground
the boy just looked at me
his emotion hard to see
and he said to me

"no one said a sound
and yet no one gathered round
and i just wanted to see
if they wanted me or sound i keep"

and then he played a sound
and people gathered round
a sweet melody
never off a key
and it seemed to me

that the best sound
ever heard in that town
was not the sweet melody
but the result you see

the clapping going round
till you couldnt hear a sound
acting in harmony
with the boys sweet melody
and the beautiful harmony
was enough to go round

CabbitGirl
March 2nd, 2006, 01:28 AM
theyre both really good HB, youve got talent =^_^= keep up the good work

Saiel
March 2nd, 2006, 01:13 PM
Are you just sharing or do you want criticism? If you're not looking for the latter, I doubt you'll want to hear what I have to say.

Honeybee
March 3rd, 2006, 07:48 PM
critze me all you want ^ ^ i need to handle it and learn from it to pursue better writting

thanks cabbit ^ ^ i will