Left Behind

[Hell_Cat_18]

~*Left Behind*~

Take me with you
Please don't leave me here
I'll hide away
In the back I promise to stay
Silent and smiling
But deep inside I'm crying
Once again you've left me behind
Maybe someone should do to you in kind
Forgoten again
I don't know where to begin
All I have is a silent night
This was never right
You've left me behind
Now I do to you in kind
Silent nights are now your friend
This wound will never mend
Load the gun and pull the trigger
Your new friend is the grave digger
You left me behind
And now...I do to you in kind...

[Dark's Angel]

I like it. It has a sad and angsty feel to it and I can relate to it in some ways. I can feel the emotion flowing off of every line. This person left you behind...now you're going to leave him behind.

I like this part of it alot.
"I'll hide away
In the back I promise to stay
Silent and smiling
But deep inside I'm crying
Once again you've left me behind
Maybe someone should to to you in kind
Forgoten again"
You most likely don't want to show that you're crying. You have to be strong for you're own sake...

[Hell_Cat_18]

Wow...I think that's the first time that someone has ever read that deep into my writting. Thank you from the bottom of my heart...it means a lot to me. :happy:

[Gelmir_of_the_crows]

As you writing always does. I have been touched and warned all the same time.

[Hell_Cat_18]

I didn't really mean for it to be a warning...I was venting in all reality. Anywho...I'm glad you like it.

[Honeybee]

nice ending

i kind of wanted more discription but in the same time not
because while the imagery was jumbled in my mind one of the many messages i found in that poem was clear and cold

[Hell_Cat_18]

That was definatly what I was going for...I've noticed that I've had a bit of a problem lately getting imagery into my poems. I think it's because I'm expressing my feelings more so than events.