Bloody Rain

[Hell_Cat_18]

~*Bloody Rain*~

A bloody rain
Falls on the fight to stay sane
Never to rest or see the light
My worst nightmares haunt the night
Every moment is cold and dark
My song as silent as the dead lark
Here and now waiting to die
This is where I will forever lie
In the end it seems so wrong
That I've had to endure this so long
Left inside my dying shell
Only the shadows my story will tell
The light has gone and so must I
A haunted sob escapes as I begin to cry
They come at last silent and cold
The chains to my life their clawed hands hold
Standing before the demon ties
One by one they shout my lies
Pushed to the ground down on my knees
They only laugh at my sob ridden plees
The blade raised high and ready stands
Falling down with a death dealing sigh
A silent scream my final word
As I fall into the fires of my own created world...

[Sabe]

Damn...that is...wow. It reminds me of "Faust" for some reason. Nice...

[GundamFreakX]

Hell Cat, you make some of the greatest poems ever. I enjoy reading them all, and this one is no exception. Excellent job.

[Hell_Cat_18]

:snuggle: :hug: :glomp2: Thank you so much guys, I was afraid no one would like it. It means a lot to me that you guys like them so much. *huggles and licks* :happy:

[boondock_saint]

coolies...:happy:

[Godgrave]

*huggles and licks* :happy:
*is licked by accident* Hehe, cool poem HC.

Sabe, you're talking if that German alchemist guy ne ?

[Sabe]

Sabe, you're talking if that German alchemist guy ne ?

Alchemist, Necromancer, Doctor...fool. Yeah, that'd be him. Doctor Faustus, from Goeth's play.

[Hell_Cat_18]

Thanx GG and Boondock *huggles and licks for you too*

Great to see you back Boondock ;)

[wolfos3d]

Wow!! Great poem HC. Best one I've read in a while. :)

[Gelmir_of_the_crows]

As any other time, I love your writing. I'm sure many of us have had these times. For you I'm afraid they they haunt you much like your dreams and the shadows that falls with the evening light. But know that I will alway try as hard as I can to hold the sun in the sky.

[Honeybee]

this one is similar to you other one but carries in a different direction

i think you used die to much in the begining and i was kind of seeing a different ending

My song as silent as the dead lark
you shouldn't use that many as' it takes away from the effect


Left inside my dying shell

this is my favorite line i can see it, and i think i represents your poem well

[Hell_Cat_18]

Thanx Honeybee, and yeah I'm trying to work on using the same word twice in the same line. I'm actually trying to get my writting back, I actually kinda lost it there for awhile, but I thank you for your comments.